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Old 05-05-2016, 03:41 PM
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Does this make sense?

I wrote this when drunk the last time, thought I had my "creative flow." Curious if anyone gets it for sh*ts and giggles sake...It was supposedly about sobriety or alcoholism, hard to decipher.

Mind Games
The diminishing feeling,
It fades completely
Shadows echoed, yet spaces tightly cornered
A mixture, a raging flame, inferno ignited by circumstance
Because, just because, I don’t know, no comment
Same and same pledged again as forces unite to deprive
Forces fade, memories lessen, yet stigma hangs true
Like moss on siding, cobwebs in a basement
Complicated puzzles webbed to define
The torch still stands, it beckons its worship
Praising, pleasing, pushing, it all blazes glory
Lit, a moment in despair, a chance flaming tall
Intersected, hope careened with love, nature tumbling down
So breathe. I breathe. And bow down to the flames.
Because I’m here. Same place, identical everything.
So the feeling becomes façade. Diminish, delete, forget
What happened?
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Old 05-05-2016, 03:44 PM
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I think I'm describing getting drunk.
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I think I'm describing getting drunk.
I think you are describing the neverending cycle of getting drunk. It truly is a cycle. Get drunk. Wake up hungover. Rinse. Repeat.
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It seems to me like it represents how we make things unnecessarily complicated.
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Old 05-05-2016, 03:53 PM
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Yes, apparently I like to state it with poetic justice. I have a journalism degree (but I'm in marketing) and love to write. Apparently I'm posting poems on my computer, a writing area I haven't delved in since college 13 years ago. At least the sentiment is true. Even my drunk self knows how crappy being an alcoholic truly is.
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Proverbs 23:29-32 ESV

Who has woe? Who has sorrow? Who has strife? Who has complaining? Who has wounds without cause? Who has redness of eyes? Those who tarry long over wine; those who go to try mixed wine. Do not look at wine when it is red, when it sparkles in the cup and goes down smoothly. In the end it bites like a serpent and stings like an adder.
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Old 05-05-2016, 06:15 PM
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If that's how you write drunk, I think your sober creative writing is going to be great.
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I remember a girl complimented on a poem I wrote and posted online when I was drunk. Sad thing is I feel zero interest in creative writing after getting sober.
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If that's how you write drunk, I think your sober creative writing is going to be great.
Thank you. I hope that is the case. I've gotten too attached to imbibing while writing (though I do it sober a ton too). That lifted my mood!
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I remember a girl complimented on a poem I wrote and posted online when I was drunk. Sad thing is I feel zero interest in creative writing after getting sober.
That won't be and isn't my case. Sadly, I've decided I'm more fluent and creative when I drink, and that isn't truly so. I'm a very creative person, and a great writer. But my coping mechanisms are shot to hell and I need to realign my skills. They aren't dead, they just need resharpening.

I'm trying to remind myself of that every day. Every single day.
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