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03fifteen · 08-31-2009, 02:16 PM

I wrote this poem the other night. Trying to get through the house in the middle of the night in the dark. My dad keeps things he doesn't need.

The Hoarder's House

Boxes all around
piled high
like walls of a maze
in your own house.
"Don't throw that away,
I could use it,
someday."
And when someday comes,
you can't even find it.

heatherette · 09-05-2009, 06:04 PM

i love it. the syntax is amazing for the topic because it counteracts the complexity of a hoarders house. its cool. so simple but so blunt it says so much. like it love it.

03fifteen · 09-07-2009, 06:20 AM

thank you heatherette.

MAB · 02-08-2010, 11:23 PM

This is very good, so much said in so very few words. I'd love to read more

PS- just personal opinion here (feel free to discard) if you use the word home versus house, it makes it more personal.

08-31-2009, 02:16 PM	#1 (permalink)
03fifteen Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Vermont Posts: 59 Blog Entries: 2	"The hoarder's house" a poem I wrote I wrote this poem the other night. Trying to get through the house in the middle of the night in the dark. My dad keeps things he doesn't need. The Hoarder's House Boxes all around piled high like walls of a maze in your own house. "Don't throw that away, I could use it, someday." And when someday comes, you can't even find it.

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09-05-2009, 06:04 PM	#2 (permalink)
heatherette haliegh. Join Date: Aug 2009 Posts: 11 Blog Entries: 1	i love it. the syntax is amazing for the topic because it counteracts the complexity of a hoarders house. its cool. so simple but so blunt it says so much. like it love it.

09-07-2009, 06:20 AM	#3 (permalink)
03fifteen Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Vermont Posts: 59 Blog Entries: 2	thank you heatherette.

02-08-2010, 11:23 PM	#4 (permalink)
MAB Member Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Orlando, FL Posts: 31 Blog Entries: 1	This is very good, so much said in so very few words. I'd love to read more PS- just personal opinion here (feel free to discard) if you use the word home versus house, it makes it more personal.

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